Write a different ending of the chapter: "That night, when Alex had gone to sleep, TOM picked up his diary and began writing." (compare p.43, l.34f)Friday, 8 February
After one month I had my first meeting with Alex.
I'm so glad that he likes me cause I feared Alex hates me because I left him.
That was the greatest day I've ever had.
To have fun with my son gives me a feeling I can't describe.
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hey ho !
I think, this is a nice idea, how Tom's diary can be !
To me, the things that you wrote sounds very realistic !
However I have a little question to the picture, that you chose.
Why did you decide to take this pic?
I ask you that, because, I don't know, what this have to do with that situation.
Anja ♥~
I can only agree to what Anja said about your diary entry - well done, Robert!
Dear Robert
You make a good "dary-part" ,but the sentence "After one month I had my first meeting with Alex." is wrong,or not?
Tom had his first meeting with alex after 16 years...
Or I understand it wrong? o.ô
I agree with Anja and have the same question "Why did you decide to take this picture" ??
See you in school!
>> Katchen <<
~Hey Robert!~
You have wrote a good diary-part but why is this day the graetest for Tom?, and I don't wirte, that he has fear for Alex. Do you agree with me?
I find your last sentence very very good, I like it.
P.S.:The picture of the car I do not like it is not suitable to your blog
~Koray~
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